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Poetry Alaysa 704

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she sat on her bed

in silence

nowhere,

to go,

no one

to turn to

the only place she has is

the darkness!

 

 

Anthony

i look into his eyes

words cant explain

the way i feel

about him

hes

my life

my everything

the best cousin

i could ever have

 

HiiM

i would stare into his

eyes

as the tears

roll down

his face

im looking

at the man i've never seen before

hes changed

all i can remeber is the day

i told him

that i loved him.

 

The day after tomorrow

i can feel the sun getting closer

it burns

its hot

to much to handle

i dont want to die

im only 13

my life just begun

i closed my eyes shut

to see what the future

would look like

all i see is a blank page

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Comments (7)

julia said

at 7:23 pm on Apr 29, 2009

this is sooo good. but a lil emo lmao ifly!!

mswilliams said

at 11:17 am on Apr 30, 2009

i really like this--keep writing and working on the poem you showed me the other day!

alaysia704 said

at 10:38 am on May 18, 2009

hmm my poems suck
i hate em
feel free to spill the juice lol
xD

chanya said

at 10:38 am on May 18, 2009

i like the first one the most

alaysia704 said

at 10:21 am on May 21, 2009

thanx fribbs

mswilliams said

at 11:24 am on May 27, 2009

I think The Day After Tomorrow is one you should stick with. How did you come up with it? I think you should revise it a little to make each line a little jewel. that sounds weird...lol...but you want each line to really mean something and be memorable. I think overall, the poem rock. But make the details count! nice job!

alaysia704 said

at 2:23 pm on May 31, 2009

thanx Ms.Williams =]

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