Word Poem (Map of My Heart)
Loving the lime juice on the
Fire escape,
I smell
The smell of home.
Her home has become
My home at the same time.
Reactions,
To Maggie by
Michele
Zina
Erik
Karl
I wonder where this
Will Go
From here, I
Wait for more ideas
How to let it happen
A grudge on you from
Prospect Park Tobacco,
Grass and Snow and Footprints and Trails
And finding a place to
Be with
Movie Theatre Popcorn,
Screaming at Hannah and
Text messaging a boy and
Ignats, fat cat.
Playing with glitter glue
Beans and water
Maracas and Play-Do and we are
In kindergarten
Sappho and Ingrid
Banned from the water shelf for the rest of the
Day
Swish,
I hate tinsel
Teeth,
When plump dies on the
silver paint.
The word curdling in my ears as I
Hope
For release.
"Pleasantly Plump,"
I am reminded.
Phish Phood,
Kernels to the concrete
Landing from above.
Maybe shatter I
Can't tell but they
Hit
A man in a wheel chair
There's a popcorn bag, too.
Words
Coming from inside.
We rush to the side and check.
Run around the top.
Road trips.
Trips to the beach with
Peanut butter and jelly on crackers and
A cucumber to dip into the sea and
A white sheet that
She lays on
Sunhat, Sunscreen, and
Attempted Relaxation
Goes in water for ten minutes and
Returns to the sheet.
The sand sticks to our wet feet and we dust it off
It gets on the square of white she is laying on and she
Notices
But doesn't say a word.
Greetings at the door
Smiling and everyday love
She runs around us and
I miss her now.
She isn't
Gone, fully.
Just her body.
Waiting for something good to be and
Finally getting it.
Meta-Poem
Jot the words of
Feelings flying from your forehead
Landing on the paper
Waiting to be.
And formed they are.
They want to
Make
Something
From their time spent
Hanging from your
Upper lip
and
Ear lobes
And they want to be
Freed from you
Away from you
Recorded in time.
They've moved on
To the paper
Where I'm sure they'll be
Excited to
Finally.
Leave.
There's one
Word
You can't seem to find
Hanging from
Your fingertip.
"I want to stay,"
The word tells you
When you find him hiding
But you shake your fist and
Make the word
Get off
And the word is
Splattered
On the page.
And you don't
Understand
Poetry at its best you
Force words
Down my throat.
This poem is another poem that I decided to write over break:
Crisps of leaves
Fall
Only fifteen minutes
More
Beside the pond
Murk, dirt, frog,
Salamander.
In the bucket, on the rock,
Escape.
Basking in the sun.
Song she sings.
"Where are you?
I hadn't realized
You were gone,"
Up from the sun
To the edge of the pond
Looking for the
Shiny back,
Silver green back,
Glazed eye.
The net's handle, long,
Was fake enough. She
Ran from the rock
"Come in,"
Shake of the head,
"Almost,"
She has heard, but insists.
"Come in,"
Outside
The stars swarm
Shoot
Overwhelm.
intention: in this poem, i just started to write. i started to write about the highlights of my break with her and then i realized it was just her. what we did didn't even matter--it was just her that i was trying to put across. i mean, she's my best friend and i wanted to show what we do. i wanted the reader to have a sense of friendship, you know? just friendship. like no one's in control of each other, but i just wanted to show friends in a different way than saying "oh, she's the only thing i have, she's my best friend and i love her. yay this is a perfect friendship." because it's not a perfect friendship, right? is there suck thing? if there were a perfect friendship with no disagreements, it would be pretty boring. they would run out of things to say.
Your Mama's Hand
Blocks of paint on your
Front door waiting
Colors melting as you
Come inside
For summer lunch and
Grab your Mama's hand and you
Tell her you're
Waiting to die that you
Want to live but still
You are waiting to
Die together
Wriggling around in your
Coffin of feather and
When the
Kids come to see
Who you were and
How you lived but
No
Your tombstone is not carved
So they don't wonder
Or see
Or find
How much
Importance you
Had and you
Gave
And you
Don't care
Don't glance over at these
Children.
I Would Like You To Know
The whole of our
Human race
Is sure as hell not the same but
Don't let yourself speak
For us all because
We
All think separately and
I know it's known
That we're not the same
And stereotypes are sent
Everyone's way at least
At first.
I need to hear
The difference
See
The difference
Before I know it even exists.
We don't all
Serve each other
Serve ourselves
Or Serve the children.
These blue eyed
Hazel eyed
Brown eyed
Green eyed ones
We do the same as us.
From My Window
From my window
I see through the glass and I
Know this is normal and there's
Glass
On the Concrete so I
I stay inside.
I want to get
Get out of this, out of this
Neighborhood but I
Doubt you can call it a neighborhood
Where we hardly even treat each other as
People.
They
They want me to be
Scared
Cultured
And oblivious to their
Plans.
Thing is, I
Am not afraid of them in fact
I
Am angry,
Mad at the stereotyping and
Thoughts of their civilizations
As superior.
They chatter to each other, giggle
To each other and
I'm here
Still
Angry and
He still had left?
Waited For Me
It's
Over.
War, violence, blood, guns, screaming is
Over and done and I am
Back
Back to my
Darling and we kiss
One time out of one in
Two and a half years of
Darling deprivation.
To be home is
A miracle, I believe? One I've
Missed and
Longed for and
At last I am home,
Resuming life I
Hope.
I've returned
Found her
And find out find out
Find out
My daughter daughter
Seven
Has passed by, away.
Jesus
Hand on his hip
And I watch the man
The roof as his haven
Burning Jesus
Mary and Joseph their
Figures in the smoke
His friend wanders up
Found him almost and I
Retreat.
Inspired Poem
I walk back
The woman with the ostrich feather hat speaks,
Don't let me drift.
But with a low sigh I
Push her away
Lump of sugar
We run from you
Your
Tiny grains
Sweet
But we run
It's too sweet for us
The horses
Help us along.
I didn't ask
For this much of a
Responsibility
I
Just
Wanted
You.
Surrender
Fighting off
Your conscience
Is not at all easy--
You have to have
Reason
Wit
To outsmart
Your conscience in a battle.
Your feelings, your
Your mind
Not just construction
Nor robotics
And engineering
And science
Not just a technical twist of tubes
We're still different
trying
to fight your conscience
block out all emotion
and consideration of right and wrong
but
Surrender.
Mother's Day
it is
today.
i am sitting on the chair
and she sits behind me
legs
hanging off the side of the bed
and we are talking
about
how he didn't do anything for her
didn't plan anything special for today.
how she thinks her mothering styles have changed
and she asks me
and i turn around to face her
i walk over
and i agree
and she asks me how
and i have no idea what to say.
i tell her we're all changing a lot lately.
she nods
i
give her a hug
and she starts to cry.
i've never seen her like this before
and it's obvious this is
the type of crying that you can't easily
stop
once you've started.
she's trying to talk
and says
it's okay
but i hug her
and tell her i love her
she sucks it in through her nose
and slowly stops
crying
and we walk into the bathroom to find
a
band-aid for my knee
which has a huge scrape
from falling
and a rash around the scrape
from an allergic reaction to
the previous band-aid.
she has already
dropped the subject of before
but she starts up again, crying
and i hug her again
and it's my turn to tell her
it's okay
and she says to me back
"don't take care
of me."
i'm surprised
taken back
and i let go of her shoulders
i am offended
but i understand that she
doesn't want
her own daughter
to take away her role
of mother.
You Will (Emulated from "Lines of the Fortune Cookie")
Your life will be a stream
of ideas that can never fully form.
You know where to find the key to her heart.
When you sing a song, a premature baby is born.
I love you
Poetry and words overflow,
Come out of the cup and land on you.
Your acne gel has not been doing its proper job.
Your beauty will break someone's heart.
Your eyes
Make me so emotional that I Can't Look.
You will loose something of no importance soon,
And it won't matter.
You are envied by just more than half of the people you meet.
Are your legs tired?
You been running through someone's mind
All Day.
Your joints will
Ache
Tomorrow.
Go fix your computer.
Stop wondering
About things that you can't have.
Remember to CAPITALIZE the first letter after a period.
Don't forget to be positive.
Favorite Poetry:
Mother's Day
it is
today.
i am sitting on the chair
and she sits behind me
legs
hanging off the side of the bed
and we are talking
about
how he didn't do anything for her
didn't plan anything special for today.
how she thinks her mothering styles have changed
and she asks me
and i turn around to face her
i walk over
and i agree
and she asks me how
and i have no idea what to say.
i tell her we're all changing a lot lately.
she nods
i
give her a hug
and she starts to cry.
i've never seen her like this before
and it's obvious this is
the type of crying that you can't easily
stop
once you've started.
she's trying to talk
and says
it's okay
but i hug her
and tell her i love her
she sucks it in through her nose
and slowly stops
crying
and we walk into the bathroom to find
a
band-aid for my knee
which has a huge scrape
from falling
and a rash around the scrape
from an allergic reaction to
the previous band-aid.
she has already
dropped the subject of before
but she starts up again, crying
and i hug her again
and it's my turn to tell her
it's okay
and she says to me back
"don't take care
of me."
i'm surprised
taken back
and i let go of her shoulders
i am offended
but i understand that she
doesn't want
her own daughter
to take away her role
of mother.
intention: this poem is something that happened to me with my mom. i would consider us close, but i couldn't really understand why she said that to me. i didn't understand it, and i was kind of hurt by it. this is actually something that has changed me because i didn't know that my mom had a side like this. usually i can figure her out, so this experience was a different kind of experience for me. i've known her my whole life, and i know what she's doing, so this was weird for me. i'm trying to show that in this poem, and i'm also trying to make myself realize that i don't know everything. i guess it's also showing that you don't really know a person as well as you might think. it's not like she was hiding anything, it's just i'd never seen her as vulnerable as i did on mother's day. it's also not like i didn't know her, it's a side i'd never seen in my life of her. i was really surprised. this poem may seem kind of blunt, but it definitely has alternative meaning to just--"i was surprised," or "i was offended," or something along the lines of that. i felt weird. i'm sure many people can relate to this--like you feel surprised it actually happened, you would have never thought about this happening.
process: for this poem, i was trying to take a different approach. i thought about something that actually did change my point of view on something or change me in some way, and this was it. it was in class, and i just started to write. it flowed and came out pretty well, and a lot of the original poem is still here. all i really did in revision was change a few words and rearrange a few words. the meaning didn't change for me--it was still seeing something in a new light. i felt that it was pretty good, and got its point across.
Word Poem (Map of My Heart)
Loving the lime juice on the
Fire escape,
I smell
The smell of home.
Her home has become
My home at the same time.
Reactions,
To Maggie by
Michele
Zina
Erik
Karl
I wonder where this
Will Go
From here, I
Wait for more ideas
How to let it happen
A grudge on you from
Prospect Park Tobacco,
Grass and Snow and Footprints and Trails
And finding a place to
Be with
Movie Theatre Popcorn,
Screaming at Hannah and
Text messaging a boy and
Ignats, fat cat.
Playing with glitter glue
Beans and water
Maracas and Play-Do and we are
In kindergarten
Sappho and Ingrid
Banned from the water shelf for the rest of the
Day
Swish,
I hate tinsel
Teeth,
When plump dies on the
silver paint.
The word curdling in my ears as I
Hope
For release.
"Pleasantly Plump,"
I am reminded.
Phish Phood,
Kernels to the concrete
Landing from above.
Maybe shatter I
Can't tell but they
Hit
A man in a wheel chair
There's a popcorn bag, too.
Words
Coming from inside.
We rush to the side and check.
Run around the top.
Road trips.
Trips to the beach with
Peanut butter and jelly on crackers and
A cucumber to dip into the sea and
A white sheet that
She lays on
Sunhat, Sunscreen, and
Attempted Relaxation
Goes in water for ten minutes and
Returns to the sheet.
The sand sticks to our wet feet and we dust it off
It gets on the square of white she is laying on and she
Notices
But doesn't say a word.
Greetings at the door
Smiling and everyday love
She runs around us and
I miss her now.
She isn't
Gone, fully.
Just her body.
Waiting for something good to be and
Finally getting it.
intention: okay. this poem was originally an assignment to make a list of things that had meaning to you. i didn't really have an overall meaning, but all of the aspects meant something to me. i ended up revising it, because i think it was too much of just a list, you know? i thought it was just a list of words--like that fortune cookie poem. i don't think it really had a meaning, it was just pretty lines placed together. so, i revised it and i fleshed it out, fleshed out what those things actually mean. i wanted the readers to relate to things like going to the beach, going to the movies, death. i mean, these things are important to my life, right? i just thought that people could relate to the events and things in this poem, rather than not being able to understand what i was talking about at all. i think i wanted to get across a sense of comfort to the reader, because i picked out sad things and things that comforted me throughout my life, really. these things are important to me.
process: in this poem, i think it started out not so good. the lines were simply a couple of words and i didn't have a main point or idea that really meant anything to me. i left it like that for a while, because i really didn't know what to do. then, the class looked over my poem and helped me through, kind of, so i could really revise the ideas so that the readers could understand them. the poem was originally a class assignment, and what i thought it should be was confusing to the reader, so that they didn't quite understand what i was saying. later, i realized that they should understand it at least a little bit. that's what made my poem better. in the process, i added in a stanza about going to the beach with my family. a lot of my poems seem to be about my mom without me even realizing it. i just write about her because she's such a big part of my life. so i added the stanza about the beach, and i feel that it's kind of the biggest part of the poem. i'm glad i added this in, because it shows a lot of feeling without it being blunt with the feeling, you know? yeah. that's pretty much it.
This poem is another poem that I decided to write over break:
Crisps of leaves
Fall
Only fifteen minutes
More
Beside the pond
Murk, dirt, frog,
Salamander.
In the bucket, on the rock,
Escape.
Basking in the sun.
Song she sings.
"Where are you?
I hadn't realized
You were gone,"
Up from the sun
To the edge of the pond
Looking for the
Shiny back,
Silver green back,
Glazed eye.
The net's handle, long,
Was fake enough. She
Ran from the rock
"Come in,"
Shake of the head,
"Almost,"
She has heard, but insists.
"Come in,"
Outside
The stars swarm
Shoot
Overwhelm.
intention: in this poem, i just started to write. i started to write about the highlights of my break with her and then i realized it was just her. what we did didn't even matter--it was just her that i was trying to put across. i mean, she's my best friend and i wanted to show what we do. i wanted the reader to have a sense of friendship, you know? just friendship. like no one's in control of each other, but i just wanted to show friends in a different way than saying "oh, she's the only thing i have, she's my best friend and i love her. yay this is a perfect friendship." because it's not a perfect friendship, right? is there suck thing? if there were a perfect friendship with no disagreements, it would be pretty boring. they would run out of things to say.
process: at first, i was just writing. then i realized that this poem was actually about me and my friends' vacation. all i really did to this was revise a word here or there, and the intention pretty much stayed the same throughout the whole of this poem's process. the section with dialogue was the most confusing for me to change, because it seemed like one of the speakers was somehow in control of the other. the way that i said, "she had been told" kind of made it so that one was in control. i knew i had to change that section, but i didn't know how. finally, i decided to add in some repetition and resistance in the poem, because it was sending off that one person had the other in the palm of their hand and thats not how my friendship with her is. that's probably not how any real relationship ever is.
Your Mama's Hand
Blocks of paint on your
Front door waiting
Colors melting as you
Come inside
For summer lunch and
Grab your Mama's hand and you
Tell her you're
Waiting to die that you
Want to live but still
You are waiting to
Die together
Wriggling around in your
Coffin of feather and
When the
Kids come to see
Who you were and
How you lived but
No
Your tombstone is not carved
So they don't wonder
Or see
Or find
How much
Importance you
Had and you
Gave
And you
Don't care
Don't glance over at these
Children.
intention: for this poem i didn't really have a point in the beginning. it was some school-night, and i felt like i had to write a poem. i didn't really know what it meant, i just kind of went with it. i was just thinking onto the keyboard, and this came out. i didn't know what it meant. now, i think i'm trying to get across someone breaking something to someone important to them and them not understanding. even though i didn't clearly say that the mother doesn't understand their child, i think it's somehow showing through, at least to me, that the mother doesn't quite understand what their kid is saying or why they are telling them it. it makes me think about growing up and not being understood. it also makes me think about pre-planned things that are set in stone but you don't know even if they are going to actually happen.
process: this poem was one that i wrote for nothing. i had a good line in my head for the middle of a poem, and i fleshed out around it to make this poem. it was on some night that i had nothing to do, probably a school-night, and i just started to write this poem. i wasn't going to actually use it in school, i thought it would just be a poem for my personal collection (which hasn't actually started yet). so all i really did was write out for this one line and it became this poem. i actually didn't like it. now i kind of see more meaning to it. i revised certain words and added in the bit about the children because it's about a son talking to his mother (when the son is an adult) and the mother doesn't understand him anymore. she misses the child side of him, because the older side seems fake and unknown to her. it's also there because the kid inside the son is kind of disappointed but the son doesn't really care anymore. that's pretty much what i did for this poem. it has no stanzas because i wouldn't know where an idea fully ended and a new growth of it sprouted in the poem. (so i wouldn't know where to break it.)
Comments (18)
ingrid said
at 9:02 pm on Apr 7, 2009
hi.
mr. ravin said
at 6:13 pm on Apr 8, 2009
great job, ingrid. they're really really nice.
mr. ravin said
at 10:12 am on Apr 29, 2009
wonderful wonderful job, ingrid. really well done!
evan said
at 9:06 pm on May 12, 2009
you make it seem effortless.
ingrid said
at 9:56 pm on May 12, 2009
wow. thanks, evan
ingrid said
at 9:57 pm on May 12, 2009
as in wow, WOW!
it surprises me.
iliana said
at 6:11 pm on May 14, 2009
checkz out my poem! i just want to get peeps to read it...
sam said
at 6:25 pm on May 14, 2009
hurm
ingrid said
at 11:23 pm on May 14, 2009
joo like?
mr. ravin said
at 8:51 am on May 15, 2009
i do! oh, you weren't talking to me. you're really a poet, ingrid. you have some really beautiful stuff here. i especially love your two "mom" poems: mother's hand and mother's day. they are powerful and sooth in a way that good poetry works.
tiffany705 said
at 10:15 am on May 15, 2009
LuV YoUr wOrD PoEm iTs nIcE=]
evan said
at 10:39 am on May 15, 2009
Meta Poem makes me think about personified words.. Also, as if expression through words (really just expression in general) is crap that you want to get off your chest (the word on your finger that actually TELLS you it wants to stay but, just HAVE to flick off), as if it's kind of a burden.
I like how you space quotations to the side. Keep it!
ingrid said
at 2:01 pm on May 17, 2009
thank you guys! again!
adam said
at 10:32 am on May 18, 2009
wow the mothers day poem was amazing. It kind of reminded me of myself with my dad. Wow really good.
sylvia said
at 4:23 pm on May 18, 2009
gah. jesus. ingrid. these are frackin fabulous. and amazing. and all around . . . just beautiful. like. i can just really feel your emotions.
and the way you write them, the little things and the run on sentences and, it's all, just, PERFECT. please be a poet when you grow up.
and i ain't joking here.
ingrid said
at 9:45 pm on May 19, 2009
thank you guys!
sylvia i miss you.
ingrid said
at 9:45 pm on May 19, 2009
frackin' a lot
gabriela said
at 9:17 am on May 20, 2009
it made me think about my own summer days........(i'll continue it)
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