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Poetry Samantha 704

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The Wait

         SamanthaTorres

I waited for you

but you never came

and im the one to blame

for pushing away

so that you could not stay

and now that you wont come back

my heart is falling fast into a crack

of darkness

while i sit in sadness

on this cold december day

 

 

Forgotten

     Samantha Torres

 

Did you

forget

i was alive?

no but--

but what?

your not what i though

you were

what?

you know what!i was just one of those

weidos

of the street

no your not its just--

that you didnt like me.

and thats ok

now its my time to

shine and that place is not here

what i dont get this at all!

ok ,well maybe you can get this

its my time to go now.

 

 

Gabriel

     Samantha Torres

 

That baby

 

Those eyes

 

That smile

 

The walk

 

That baby talk

 

That baby

 

If the most beautiful baby i have ever seen.

 

Comments (2)

mswilliams said

at 11:39 am on Apr 30, 2009

nice job working on the ends of the lines!

mswilliams said

at 11:30 am on May 27, 2009

i really like the two voice poem!!! i think you can work on making it sound more like poetry. focus on the really important words and delete words that don't do anythig

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